‘Box Room’ is a poem about going to stay with a boyfriend’s parents for the first time. A box room is a small room in a house, usually converted into a bedroom. Lochhead will be sleeping in the box room while she is staying there. The box room symbolises the claustrophobia she feels, as her initial awkwardness at the fact she shares her boyfriend’s love with his mother soon gives way to a depression at the long-term state of their relationship. This is emphasised as Lochhead begins to learn more about her boyfriend as a young man, from all the artefacts in his old bedroom.
The poem begins with three minor sentences (none of the sentences contain verbs). The short sentences give the opening of the poem a staccato (short, rapid) rhythm, which creates a sense of panic, and suggests Lochhead may be nervous about meeting her boyfriend’s mother for the first time. Although the opening sentences seem pleasant, Lochhead does not give the reader time to reflect on the opening tone because of the short sentences. She immediately changes the mood of the poem by stating ‘then she put me in my place’. This has a double meaning, both in terms of showing Lochhead to the box room where she will be staying, as well as ‘putting her in her place’, as in showing her who’s boss. This use of a double meaning emphasises that while the mother is being nice to Lochhead to her face, she can tell that there is some tension behind the scenes. The mother clearly sees Lochhead as a temporary girlfriend, and she emphasises her own permanent role in the man’s life. This is illustrated with the mother’s first line ‘this room/was always his’. The use of ‘always’ gives a sense of permanence, and highlights the fact that the mother has always been in her son’s life. She becomes more open about stating that Lochhead is temporary by saying that the son sleeps in the box room, apart from when ‘he brings a friend’. This not only highlights that Lochhead is only regarded as a ‘friend’ and therefore not in a serious relationship, but also hints that there have been other ‘friends’ before Lochhead. This is reinforced later in the stanza, when the mother says about the sofa bed, where the son is sleeping ‘once or twice before/ he’s slept there.’ This shows that Lochhead is regarded only as one of many, and the mother clearly doesn’t think the relationship will last long.
The mother seems to be increasingly rude to Lochhead throughout the stanza, saying ‘next door if you want to wash your face’. Although this seems nice on the surface, the mother is perhaps hinting that Lochhead has a dirty face, and that she should fix her appearance. The mother then gives Lochhead ‘peace to unpack’. Lochhead puts this in quotation marks to suggest that the mother doesn’t really mean this sentiment, and doesn’t want to give her peace, nor does she really want her to unpack. Unpacking is a symbol of permanence, as it suggests that Lochhead will be staying a while. However, Lochhead immediately states that there is no real sense of permanence by writing that it is only a ‘weekend case’ (it is a small case), and describes it as ‘lightweight, glossy, made of some synthetic miracle’. This is a metaphor for her relationship as a whole, as it seems to be artificial, and ‘lightweight’ (not really with any substance behind it). This is the first time that Lochhead hints that the relationship with her boyfriend may be imperfect, and is a change in tone from angry (because of the conflict with the mother) to depressed (because her relationship with her boyfriend may be falling apart). This is emphasised when she describes herself as being ‘left alone’. However, she soon focuses her attention back on the conflict with the mother, stating that the mother has a ‘pathetic’ attachment to her son, which manifests itself in keeping the box room as a ‘shrine to your lost boyhood’. The box room here has become a metaphor for the three-way relationship between Lochhead, her boyfriend, and his mother. The fact that the mother kept the room the same from when her son was young shows that the mother still thinks of her son as a boy. Lochhead is an uncomfortable presence in the room, as she doesn’t think of her boyfriend that way. Lochhead states that the mother thinks ‘she can brush off time with dust’, thus highlighting that the mother sees the box room as a microcosm of her relationship with her son, and that by maintaining the room as it was when he was young, so the relationship will remain the same. Lochhead says, ‘I laugh it off in self defence’, which shows that she is mocking the mother, although that she may not be that secure in herself. The fact that she admits it is self defence also indicates that there may be a fault in her relationship. This is reinforced with the final line where she claims that she has ‘come for a weekend to state her permanence’. It is left ambiguous (open to interpretation) who she needs to show her permanence too – the mother, or her boyfriend. It is clear that the conflict with the mother is opening up a number of questions about her relationship with her boyfriend.
The second stanza immediately begins with a pessimistic tone, which continues throughout. She returns to the idea of ‘peace to unpack’, repeating the mother’s phrase from the previous stanza, although says that she ‘found none’. For Lochhead, the fact that the mother has left her only gives her an opportunity to reflect on her relationship. This is not a happy feeling. Lochhead now begins to describe the box room, making it seem increasingly claustrophobic. The walls are described as ‘dun-coloured’ (a greyish brown colour), and with ‘one small window’. This subtly indicates the idea of a prison cell, and there is a growing sense of unease towards the room. Lochhead increases the sense of unease by trying to work out what is making her feel this way ‘What can I blame/for my unrest?’. This gives way to a sense of panic as she states ‘persistent fear/elbows me’. The use of enjambment makes the ‘elbows me’, somewhat shocking. The reader becomes aware of the panic at the same time as Lochhead does. She looks around the room to try and work out why she feels this sense of fear. The mention of the ‘narrow bed’ echoes the prison imagery from earlier. However, she soon works out that it is because she is not confident in her relationship. She sees a picture of her boyfriend as a younger man, which leads her to question ‘but where do I fit into the picture?’ The use of a question mark not only engages the reader, but also shows that Lochhead is experiencing growing doubts. Although she refers to the boyfriend as ‘you’ throughout the poem, it is clear that the questions are really to herself, and not to her boyfriend.
Lochhead continues to juxtapose her boyfriend’s previous life with that of their relationship, mentioning his ‘previous prizes’. This highlights that she may think of herself as something he has ‘won’, and therefore that she is likely to be discarded. She talks of her boyfriend as getting bored with his prizes: ‘plots grown thin’, again illustrating that she doesn’t feel confident in her relationship. She mentions the boyfriend’s egg collection. Eggs are an important image in Lochhead’s poetry (see also ‘Revelation’) as they symbolise womanhood (since woman give birth). An egg can be a symbol of the future (of starting a new life together) or of the past (childhood), and therefore represents the conflict between Lochhead and the mother. In addition, the box room is itself an ‘egg’ that the mother has ‘sat on’ and maintained. It is full of all of the things that were used to nurture the son. However, Lochhead’s pessimistic tone continues by stating that he has ‘no interest in’, perhaps highlighting that he doesn’t have many long-term interests. There is also a sinister note when she mentions that he stole the eggs from bird’s nests. Again, this echoes the conflict between Lochhead and the mother, as she is effectively attempting to steal her boyfriend from his mother’s nest. Lochhead again emphasises her ‘precarious position’, believing that she will eventually become an ‘abandoned object’. She uses juxtaposition to draw together the conflict between the past and the present, writing that ‘your past a premonition’. A premonition is a vision of the future, meaning that the phrase Lochhead uses is a paradox. However, she states that by looking at her boyfriend’s past, and all of the things he was interested in for a short while, she believes that is what will happen to her in the future. She states that she ‘can’t close her eyes to’, which hints at a growing obsession with the idea of time. Ironically, this is also true of the mother. Both Lochhead and the mother have become obsessed with the past. Both are upset by the thought of change. This brings the poem full circle, where the mother and Lochhead now seem to agree. Her final image is of her ‘shivering’, perhaps out of fear or anxiety, and of the ‘deceptive mildness’of the night’. The mildness represents the niceness of the situation she is in, both in terms of the mother’s friendliness, as well as her relationship with her boyfriend. However, the use of the word ‘deceptive’ suggests that neither is what it seems. The poem thus ends on this depressing and pessimistic tone.
‘Revelation’ is a poem about growing up, and about the violent destruction of innocence. It deals with a story of Lochhead as a young girl being sent to a farm to collect eggs and milk, and being frightened by the bull she sees there. Throughout the poem, Lochhead juxtaposes her own childlike naivety with that of the threatening nature of the world. There is also a female subtext that runs throughout the poem – Lochhead becomes aware of herself as a female, and states that the danger of the world comes from masculinity.
The first stanza of the poem makes it clear that this is a personal memory for Lochhead. The initial tone of the poem is one of reminiscence and perhaps even nostalgia. It starts with a description of what sounds like an idyllic childhood memory, of ‘being shown a black bull/ when a child at the farm for eggs and milk.’ This disarms the reader, and perhaps leaves them unprepared for the terrifying imagery that is to come. This approach is designed to place the reader in the same state of innocence that Lochhead was herself in. Just as the reader will be shocked by later developments, so was Lochhead herself. The first sign of something not being right is when Lochhead describes the bull as a ‘monster’. The use of this metaphor highlights the way in which Lochhead views this memory. It is clearly a dark experience, and one that still fills her with horror. What is most troubling about this experience is that all of the other people mentioned seem to be unaware of the danger, giving the bull ‘the charm of a friendly name’, and holding her hand. Given that this poem is clearly about the loss of innocence, the use of the word ‘threshold’ symbolises this barrier between innocence and the real world. There is something more sinister about not seeing the bull in this stanza, but instead knowing that he is in the darkness of the ‘outhouse’. The fact that Lochhead is ‘peering inside’ also emphasises the point that she is an outsider to this world of violence and aggression symbolised by the bull. The innocence with which she looks inside clearly highlights that she has little sense of the terror that the bull will inspire.
The second stanza begins with the deliberate non-mentioning of the bull, which serves only to increase the tension. Lochhead looks into the outhouse, and can see ‘only black/and the hot reek of him’. This makes him far more menacing, and makes it clear that he symbolises more than just a bull. The stanza begins with the dramatic pause where she cannot see the bull, until ‘Then he was immense’. The bull therefore seems to appear from nowhere, and shocks Lochhead with his size and scale. She states that ‘his edges merging with the darkness’. This gives the bull an almost paranormal quality, as if he has been created by the darkness. This metaphor also highlights the size of the bull, as he is so large it is impossible to see where he finishes and where the darkness begins. She uses alliteration to describe his size as a ‘big bulk’, thus creating a sense of his intimidating size. The plosive (harsh consonant) sound of the repeating ‘b’ also echoes her sense of surprise. He also roars in a way that terrifies Lochhead, meaning he is intimidating in his sound, his sight, and his smell. Although the bull is chained up, this does not reassure Lochhead, and she references his ‘clanking’, making it seem as if the chain is part of the bull, again making him seem more menacing and paranormal. The bull instantly begins moving in an aggressive and terrifying way, and he begins ‘roaring’. Lochhead describes his nostrils as ‘gaping like wounds’. This simile is designed to make the bull seem even more horrifying, and to heighten the drama of looking into the building. There is a real sense of menace about the bull now. This is immediately juxtaposes by the ‘oblivious’ (unaware) hens that are in the farmyard. The reader gets the sense that seeing this bull is an important moment for Lochhead, as she is no longer one of the ‘oblivious hens’, and has learned a major truth about the world.
Stanza three continues with the tone of being ‘oblivious’. The ‘faint and rather festive tinkling’ is the same noise that she earlier described as ‘trampling, and a clanking’, thus showing how innocence and terror are often just a matter of different perspectives. The hens have little sense of the violence of the bull, since they can just hear the noises that he makes, but can’t see him. The ‘hasp’ refers to the metal lock on the door of the bull’s outhouse, and shows that the hens are protected from the violence and therefore remain unaware of it. Lochhead is now aware, and therefore fears the bull, describing it as a ‘Black Mass’. Interestingly, she hints that she had been aware of the existence of the bull before she saw him. This symbolises her growing womanhood, and her instinctive sense that the world was more dangerous than it seemed. She refers to the bull as being ‘the antidote and Anti-Christ’. The repetition of ‘anti’ (meaning against) strengthens the sense that the bull represents a change in her worldview. The ‘Anti-Christ’ is a reference to the devil, and is the strongest image used in the poem to highlight the fear she feels towards the bull. The use of ‘antidote’ is interesting, in that an antidote is usually a positive thing, used to counteract a poison. This may suggest that Lochhead has some enjoyment of the violence of the bull, and on a deep level is aware that danger is exciting or interesting. However, she continues to say that the bull ‘threatened the eggs’. Like in ‘Box Room’ eggs symbolise womanhood, both in terms of childhood (having been recently ‘hatched’ and nurtured) as well as femininity (the idea of giving birth and having her own children). The bull therefore threatens both Lochhead’s sense of innocence, as well as her sense of femininity. This highlights that the bull is representative of masculinity. This is reinforced by the mention of the ‘placidity of milk’. The metaphor here extends to the idea of femininity (since only females can produce milk). Indeed, the bull, as an aggressive male cow, is threatening milk, which is the produce of a female cow. This illustrates the dynamic of a female/male conflict. Also, more subtly, the whiteness of the milk contrasts with the blackness of the bull, symbolising good and evil, or innocence and aggression.
Lochhead begins the final stanza by describing her reaction to seeing the bull. The fact that she turns and runs makes it seem as if all of the above happened in the short time it took her to react to the bull. This emphasises the importance of her ‘revelation’ as it seems as if a great deal of thoughts happened in the space of a single moment. Lochhead states that her ‘pigtails’ thumped on her back as she ran; pigtails highlight how young she was in this memory, as well as a sense of innocence. As she runs away from the farm, she goes past the ‘big boys’ who ‘pulled the wings from butterflies and/blew up frogs with straws’. This highlights how Lochhead is now aware of the violence of the male world around her, as the first boys she encounters are torturing animals. Importantly, both of the animals they are torturing – frogs and butterflies – are ones that start their life in one form, and then transform into another. Frogs start as tadpoles and butterflies start as caterpillars. Lochhead therefore is saying that she has experienced her own transformation, and now exists in her ‘fully formed state’. This is not a positive thing, as she is now at the mercy of the violent men around her. The imagery she continues to use represents her darker view of the world, with even the hedges being ‘thorned’, and the nests being ‘harried’ (harassed). The second image again highlights the female world being challenged, with nests (and therefore mother birds) being attacked. Lochhead again uses the images of eggs and milk to symbolise womanhood. However, she is intent on defending them both, and realises how vulnerable she is. She is now focused on preventing the ‘eggs shattering’ and the milk spilling. Lochhead’s revelation is therefore one of vulnerability, and the violence and aggression of the male world. She realises that she must now spend her whole life protecting herself from these things. This is a horrifying and bleak tone on which to end her poem.
Presentation on theme: "Box Room Liz Lochead."— Presentation transcript:
1 Box RoomLiz Lochead
2 SummaryThis poem is by the Scottish poet Liz Lochhead. It tells the story of a young woman (the speaker of the poem) visiting her boyfriend's childhood home to stay for the weekend. The speaker meets the boyfriend's mother, and after a perfunctory meeting, is shown to the small bedroom (box room) where she will be sleeping. It is the boyfriend's old childhood bedroom. The mother makes several barbed remarks which attempts to undermine the speaker'. It is clear that the mother is very protective of her son and does not approve of the speaker as his current girlfriend.
3 What you need to know… Imagery
Minor Sentences: sentences without a verbWord ChoiceEnjambment: Deliberately cutting off a line in the middle of a phrase to emphasise a word at the beginning or end of a line.Parenthesis: A pair of brackets.Direct SpeechImagery
4 Rhyming schemeRepetitionQuestionsPersonificationPun / Word playSymbolism
5 OxymoronAmbiguous or double meanings
6 Minor Sentences“First the welcoming. Smiles all round. A space for handshakes.”These minor sentences sound awkward and forced. This reflects the awkwardness as the two women greet each other.They almost sound like stage directions which suggests the two women are simply acting out the roles they know they should play, but actually dislike one another.
7 Word Choice “Friend” : “pathetic / shrine”
The capital F suggests that the mother has chosen this word carefully – she sees the speaker as only a friend, not a girlfriend. She makes this attitude clear through what she says.“pathetic / shrine”A shrine is a holy place of worship, usually for a saint or god. The word suggests the mother clings to her son as if she worships him. The speaker’s disgust at this is conveyed by the word “pathetic” which is a slamming condemnation of the mother.
8 Word Choice “self-defence”
By describing her laugh as self-defence, the speaker shows that she is aware of the conflict between herself and the mother; she is ready to battle the mother to keep hold of her boyfriend.“you grin gilt-edged from long discarded selves”“gilt-edged” means the pictures are in frames of gold. This hints at how the mother has turned the room into a “shrine” for the son, idolising him. However, he has changed over time as these photos are of “selves” that he has left behind.
9 Word Choice “closeted so – its dark”
Conveys a sense of claustrophobia and darkness. The room is literally small, but it also suggests the speaker feels trapped in her relationship.
10 Enjambment “A space / for handshakes” “my position / is precarious”
“Space” is emphasised at the end of the first line, suggesting that although the women are shaking hands, there is a ‘distance’ between them. This space is physically represented on the page by the gap between the end of this line and the start of the next.“my position / is precarious”Placing “position” at the end of the line imitates on the page how precarious the girl feels about her situation (in the relationship.) She feels like she is ‘on the edge’.
11 Parenthesis (Oh, with concern for my comfort)
This is almost like an aside – a comment being made to the reader by the speaker. Here, we sense irony – the girlfriend suggests the mother doesn’t care at all about her comfort.(But where do I fit into the picture?)These brackets contain a rhetorical question the speaker is asking of herself. She has been prompted by the pictures on the wall, but is actually questioning her place in her boyfriend’s life.
12 Direct Speech “…This room was always his – when he comes home
It’s here for him. Unless of course’ she said,‘He brings a Friend.’ She smiled ‘ I hope the bedIs soft enough? He’ll make do tonightIn the lounge on a put-u-up. All rightFor a night or two. Once or twice beforeHe’s slept there. It’ll all be find I’m sure – ”The speaker quotes the mothers words directly. By doing this, she makes the reader consider the mother’s words carefully. We detect the mother’s sarcasm and subtle digs and hints. (“make do” “a night or two” “once or twice before” etc..)Quoting the mother directly perhaps also suggests the speaker is mocking the mother. Her dislike is very clear.
13 Imagery (Metaphor) “her pathetic shrine to your lost boyhood”
The speaker calls the boxroom a shrine. She is suggesting that the mother has deliberately kept memories of the boy’s childhood alive, by devoting herself to keeping the room exactly the same as it was.“She must think she can brush off time with dust.”Here the speaker suggests that dust represents time and that by dusting the room and keeping it clean, the mother is trying to stop the passage of time – trying to cling to her son’s childhood.
14 Imagery“Your bookshelves are crowded with previous prizes, a selection of plots grown thin.”Physical books are compared with the boyfriend’s past relationships – relationships which have ended. “Crowded” suggests he has had a lot of previous girlfriends. “Grown thin” suggests they ended because he became bored with them, like someone becoming bored by reading the same story over and over again.
15 2nd verseExplain how the speaker is feeling in this section. Does she still feel secure in her relationship?What is the change in tone?Identify two rhetorical questions. What effect do they create?Identify personification. Explain the image.Think about the word “shatters”. What is the significance of this word?
16 First the welcoming. Smiles all round. A space
For handshakes. Then she put me in my place –(Oh, with concern for my comfort).
17 ……………………………‘This room
Was always his – when he comes homeIt’s here for him. Unless of course,’ she said,‘He brings a Friend.’ She smiled ‘I hope the bedIs soft enough? He’ll make do tonightIn the lounge on the put-u-up. All right
18 For a night or two. Once or twice before
He’s slept there. It’ll all be fine I’m sure –Next door if you want to wash your face.’Leaving me ‘peace to unpack’ she goes.
19 ……………………….My weekend case
(Lightweight, glossy, made of some syntheticMiracle) and I are left alone in her patheticShrine to your lost boyhood. She mustThink she can brush off time with dustFrom model aeroplanes. I laugh it off in self defence.Who have come for a weekend to state my permanence.
20 Peace to unpack – but I found none
In this spare room which once contained you. (Dun-Coloured walls, one small window which used to frameYour old horizons). What can I blameFor my unrest, insomnia?
21 ……………………….Persistent fear
Elbows me, embedded deeply hereIn an outgrown bed (Narrow, but no narrowerThan the single bed we sometimes share).On every side you grin gilt edged from long-discarded selves(But where do I fit into the picture?)
22 …………………………………Your bookshelves
Are crowded with previous prizes, a selectionOf plots grown thin. Your egg collectionShatters me – that now you have no interestIn. (You just took one from each, you never wrecked a nest,You said).
23 Invited guest among abandoned objects, my position
Is precarious, closeted so – it’s dark, your past a premonitionI can’t close my eyes to, I shiver despiteThe electric blanket and the deceptive mildness of the night.
24 Thinking about Character
Task:Draw a three ringed Venn Diagram. Label each ring for each character: Speaker, Mother, Boyfriend
25 Thinking about Character
Task:Write out any parts of the poem which tell you something about the character in the appropriate ring. Explain in a few words what this tells you.Are there any overlaps? Write these into the crossing sections of the diagram.
27 Point (what I will show in this paragraph)
Evidence (quote from the poem)Explain (explain how this proves my point, unpack any techniques, and give a personal reaction to theme)Link back to question (show how this answers the question)©
28 Writing about Character
Task: To write a mini essay (3 paragraphs) about each of the 3 characters and their role in the poem.S: The speaker / mother / boyfriend is…..Q: We know this because “……..”U: Demonstrate that you understand the quotation.A: Analyse techniques used in the quotation. Use technical vocabulary to show how the reader is made aware of this aspect of character. Mention the reader’s response / reaction.
29 Writing about Character
Task: To write a mini essay (3 paragraphs) about each of the 3 characters and their role in the poem.P: The speaker / mother / boyfriend is…..E: We know this because “……..”E: Demonstrate that you understand the quotation. Analyse techniques used in the quotation. Use technical vocabulary to show how the reader is made aware of this aspect of character. Mention the reader’s response / reaction.L: Link back to the question. What does it tell you about their role in the poem?
30 Character Peer Assessment Is there a clear opening statement (P)?
Does the quotation link to the statement?Is there a clear analysis, demonstrating understanding of the quotation?Have they used technical language in their analysis?Is there a link to the question?
31 ThemePast Motherly love Love Childhood Loneliness Doubt Sleep Jealousy AmbiguityWrite an explanation, including quotations, about how each of these words fits into the poem.See if you can add to the list.
32 ToneWrite about a poem which features a contrast or variety of different tones.Show what techniques the writer uses to create these tones and go on to explain how they give you a clearer understanding of the poem’s subject.
33 Stanza 1 – tone of defiance / aggressiveness / sarcasm
QuotePoints for Evaluation(Oh with concern for my comfort)Sarcasm created by the aside in brackets.Pathetic ShrineConnotations of ‘pathetic’Connotations of ‘shrine’She must think she can brush off time with dust from model aeroplanesMetaphor – time& dustAccusatory tone: repetition of “she”Illustrates the mother’s relationship with the son.I laugh it off in self-defence.Connotations of “self-defence” suggest a battle between the women.“Laugh” shows speaker’s attitude.Who have come for a weekend to state my permanenceEmphasis of being last line of stanza 1, reflects how defiant and strong the speaker feels.“Permanence” – demonstrates speaker’s intentions.
34 Essay Writing: Introductions
TextAuthorGenreLink to QuestionSummary
35 Analysis: Step One Identify the Technique
NAME THE TECHNIQUE BEING USEDEXPLAIN WHAT IS BEING DESCRIBEDWhen talking about ________ Lochhead uses [name technique]……When describing ____________ Lochhead employs a [name technique]In lines ______ Lochhead uses [name technique] when describing _______________The use of [name technique] helps give the reader an impression of ____________Using [name technique] in lines ________ helps give the reader a picture of _________The poet describes ____________________ in line ________ using [name technique]
36 Step Two: Explain how the technique works
Word Choice – give connotationsImagery (similes & metaphors) – identify the 2 things being comparedPersonification – explain what is being personifiedEnjambment – explain what word is emphasised and where it isParenthesis – explain what words are in parenthesis and whyAmbiguous meaning – what are the two possible meanings?
37 Step Three: Explain the effect
EXPLAIN WHY THE TECHNIQUE IS USEDWHAT DOES IT TELL THE READER ABOUT THE THING BEING DESCRIBED?REITERATE HOW IT RELATES TO THE QUESTION?E.G.What does it tell us about the characters in the poem?What does it add to the reader’s understanding of the whole situation?What does it make the reader think about?What does it tell us about the poet’s message?How does it relate to Lochhead’s theme?How does it make you feel?
38 Useful Evaluative Phrases:
ShowsSuggestsHintsIndicatesDemonstratesImpliesGives the impression of/that...IllustratesEvokesConjures up the idea of...Creates a feeling of...Brings to mind...
39 Box Room’ by Liz Lochhead is a poem which describes the encounter between a girl (speaker) and her boyfriend’s mother when she visits to stay for the weekend. The girlfriend spends time in the ‘box room’ of the title (the boyfriend’s old bedroom). The poem describes her encounter with the boyfriend’s mother, as well as her observations when in the room. Through its first-person account of the girl’s stay, the poem suggests that her surroundings affect her deeply, undermining the confidence she had about her relationship and reducing her to doubt. The ending suggests that the girl realises her boyfriend is not who she thought he was, and that the relationship cannot continue.There are two clear tones present in the poem. The defiant, assertive tone of the first stanza presents the speaker’s strong attitude when in conflict with the mother. However, there is a shift in the second stanza to a more doubtful, uncertain tone when the speaker begins to question her relationship. These two different tones are created through a number of techniques, including: the use of parenthesis, word choice, metaphor, oxymoron, questions and syntax.
40 Later in stanza two, the doubtful tone which is now well established, is furthered by the description of the “abandoned objects” in the room. Seemingly innocuous childhood items begin to take on deeper significances for the speaker as she considers her relationship. She is left feeling like her relationship is hanging in the balance. This is emphasised through her use of enjambment in line 33.
41 QThe phrase “my position / is precarious” is split between the two lines so that the word “position” is at the end of the line.
42 U+A+TAlthough she is literally talking about her position: being in the box room, the clever use of the line break conveys a different idea too. Placing the word “position” at the end of the line literally puts it in a ‘precarious’ place on the page – hanging off the end of the line. This reflects what it describes; it mirrors how the girl feels her place in the relationship is uncertain and could be about to end. This adds to the tone of the stanza, emphasising the uncertainty and instability the poet clearly feels. Not only does her stay in the box room make her feel uncomfortable in the boyfriend’s house, it also makes her feel uncomfortable in the relationship.
43 ConclusionsOnce you’ve completed the main body of your essay, write a conclusion summing up your response.Recap on the techniques you have mentioned and link back to the question once more.
44 ConclusionWhile this poem appears to be a straightforward description of an insignificant experience, it is made clear that the events described have had a major impact on the speaker.Overall I feel … … towards the girl / mother because…Through her use of [list the techniques you have mentioned] Lochhead creates a dramatic and unsettling picture of a relationship breaking down. The message of the poem is clearly that someone’s background and past are an important part of their character, and that the past can affect the present in many ways. In the opening stanza the reader sides with the speaker, admiring her strength of character and wit when in conflict with the mother. By the end of the poem, our sympathy has been cemented as we fully appreciate the speaker’s vulnerabilities exposed in the equivocatory second stanza. It is largely Lochhead’s skilful use of the two contrasting tones which achieve this effect.